1.
The claim is that the world is becoming overly
controlled and effected by the use of technology. The thesis is that physical
and mental health issues can come from overusing technology. And makes the
claim that “technology runs our lives”.
2.
She gives a lot of support, many different facts
about the way that childhood obesity has evolved parallel to the large
advancements we make with our technology. The reasons are sufficient to give
data showing a big difference between the ways kids grow up now, vs then.
3.
There isn’t much talk about counter arguments. The
author acknowledges the fact that electronics can be beneficial and well woven into
our daily lives, but she doesn’t really go over any possibilities that heavy
use in electronics can have any benefit to our kids our or our lives these
days. But it is noted that the influence they have on us is turning out to be
too great of one.
4.
Sources blend in with claims well. Good job at
supporting everything author says with accurate facts that closely relate to
what you are saying. The sources are credible. But some aren’t as current as
they could be to further prove her point. Being that technology has greatly
evolved since 2012 even. (Mentioned part of the statistics in this essay.)
5.
The writer assumes that we can see a big change
in the way the world works now as it is obviously always around us. I think the
author is somewhat influenced by the wave pf technology now, but can also
clearly see the negative effects it has on the world around us
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