Page 100 Questions 1-4

1. One of the most obvious things to come from her writing is the passion that she has about it. she does a good job of showing the author that she has a lot of knowledge about this topic, and she uses various statistics to prove so. She shows the importance of this topic through the serious need for change. Because the effect we have on this world is a great one.
2. She counter argues that sometimes it may be easier to buy food wherever you may find it. But she still really tires to express the importance of supporting local farmers.
3. " On small farms, sometimes a farmer will pasture his cattle in the previous year's cornfield; The cattle eat some of the stubble left from last year's crop and fertilize the field." This quote is especially effective at driving the point that big farms do nothing like this. They keep planting and producing year after year until they strip the land of all nutrients and have to move on. where as she is stating smaller farms are more conservative in the way of doing what is best to sustain the land, and their farms to their best possible ability.
4. A good example of her effective use of pictures would be the comparison between the polyculture and monoculture farms. The monocultural farm is simply just jam packed with the largest amount of produce the can jam pack into the land; with the intent to distribute it as far and wide as their wallets will open. where as, in the polyculture farm, the soil looks extremely fertile, the crops are spread out and bright green, and there are people in the fields. weather working on the farm, or harvesting. The polyculture farm will see more human hands than any monoculture, machine run farm ever would.

Position Essay ROUGH

Argument Essay

Sarah Hamal

                The big question these days, is what to consider a sport? Most persons who preform or have a somewhat active or competitive hobby that they enjoy, it usually is safe to assume they consider it their sport. One example of this could be pageantry. Kids preform, the parents provide money in order to do this, and someone always wins. This twisted little sport has actually become very popular through a show called Toddlers and Tiaras. This show actually contorts the idea to young girls, that comparing yourself to another girl in any way is okay, when it actually is a terrible influence on the young mind. In every aspect, this type of performance and completion between adolescent girls anywhere from 6 months old, to about 10 shows these girls acting way older than they actually are. Some of them even compete with 20 year old women and up to take home to overall pageant supreme titles. And with that the mothers will put any amount of time or money into their child to make them the “prettiest’ and most polished girl to walk across the stage. Not to mention they do this to the same level and intensity of the much older girls. Including every makeup, nail and hair piece routine your average model would routinely go through. It is rare to see a child on this show who actually enjoys, the process, practice and competition that these pageants bring. Clearly that the mothers and sometimes fathers really control the way that their kids become involved in this, and with that it changes the goal of being the sweetest little girl on stage, to the competition of who can be the biggest diva and take home money, trophies, and bragging rights to go along with it.

                What is most apparent here is the way the mothers are so controlling of all of this. Grosaru, Lucia. “Toddlers and child beauty pageants – Risk factors for severe psychological turmoil’s.” Everyday Psychology Everyday Psychology, 7 Sept. 2009. Web. 23 Nov. 2015. In an article by Lucia Grosaru in Everyday Psychology, the Psychologist states “Of course, these little beauties do not enter the contests at their own request, but their mothers are the ones to fill in the applications on time, pay the participation fee, create or buy the outfit, establish the type of performance for the „talent” section … create and exercise the hairstyle and make-up, keep a strict rehearsal schedule, hire trainers if the mom herself cannot coach the whole thing, fill in the gas tank and travel hundreds of miles with their children just to spend a weekend on an emotional roller coaster that for most of the mother-daughter teams has its last stop on „low”.” (Quotation from an online magazine with no page numbers). Some moms may easily over look this, but how could you willingly enter your kid into a contest that is judged so harshly on appearance and meant to prove which girl is better than the next? Beats me.

                A more than common counter argument to this is that the mothers often had grown up doing this, as it has always been a common thing, mostly in the south. They feel like it is a great idea to then pass the torch on to their daughters (sometimes sons.) for them to then carry on with the fun loving contest that they used to partake in themselves. Bennett, Jessica. "Generation Diva How our obsession with beauty is changing our kids." Newsweek Newsweek, 30 Mar. 2009. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.    In an article by Jessica Bennett in Newsweek, the writer states, "Marleigh is one of many pageant girls on the show, egged on by obsessive mothers who train their tots to strut and swagger, flip their hair and pout their lips." (Quotation from an online magazine with no page numbers.) Ultimately these mothers are turning their small children into something they should not yet be! Anything from fake teeth to heavily edited ‘head shots’ are what the pageantry world is now like, not necessarily anything close to what it consisted of when it was their time. Another argument could be that the girls really truly enjoy it. They have fun out on the stage, wearing the dresses or other costumes, winning the money, interacting with the other girls etc.

Despite all those objections there are also a few simple solutions to the questions being raised. It may be important for your child to find a way and break out of their shell, but at what cost? You can watch just about any episode of Toddlers and Tiaras and the big bold attitude of these youngsters will shine bright. Not to mention the fact that their parents promote this behavior thinking it is cute when they are sassy and have “big personalities.” Parents shape their kids into demons and then act surprised when that attitude follows them everywhere they go. Screaming, crying, complaining, and even just saying “no” to a parent is a big funny joke to these kids, all in an act for the cameras. Some could say it stops there, but at the salon, or dance studio, the kids especially love to show their talents of defying mom, in front of other people. Last but not least the atmosphere in these environments is overly stressful, and in that case a lot of unhealthy relationships are formed between children for various stupid reasons. With everyone getting ready, scoping the competition, and feeding their kids with as much energy as possible it is a death race to get your kid out on the stage in time. If two moms don’t like each other, their kids are basically in a death match to win. In these cases it could be some good competition between girls, but when one doesn’t win, even the mother of the child gets sad that they didn’t win, or do better than the other girl. As if it really mattered, there is no excuse to put your child in the position to feel like that. The kids know, when you get an award in your age class as princess that they did not do as good as the other girls that “pulled for a higher title” which simply means that they have won a supreme award instead of queen or princess, and in that case they win money and a larger crown with the supreme title.

Personally, I think that these types or events should really only be allowed for girls, or boys at least 10 years old. Somewhat close to growing up, and has the image of what a pageant really is supposed to be. With some actual ambition and drive to participate based on their own desire too. Not with a mother trying to live through her very young child.

http://psychologycorner.com/toddlers-and-children-beauty-pageants-risk-factors-for-severe-psychological-turmoils/

http://www.michelepolak.com/3099spring13/Weekly_Schedule_files/Bennett.pdf 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KJIcc_1Mesk 

Incorporating Sources Effectively

1. http://heinonline.org/HOL/LandingPage?handle=hein.journals/tresl13&div=7&id=&page=  http://heinonline.org/HOL/LandingPage?handle=hein.journals/jlawp18&div=21&id=&page=   http://www.michelepolak.com/3099spring13/Weekly_Schedule_files/Bennett.pdf  https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KJIcc_1Mesk
2. Crawford, Taylor James. "Mackenzie Toddlers & Tiaras- Top Best Moments." Online video clip. YouTube. YouTube, 26 Feb. 2015. Web. 24 Nov. 2015.
3. Bennett, Jessica. "Generation Diva How our obsession with beauty is changing our kids." Newsweek Newsweek, 30 Mar. 2009. Web. 19 Nov. 2015.    In an article by Jessica Bennett in Newsweek, the writer states, "Marleigh is one of many pageant girls on the show, egged on by obsessive mothers who train their tots to strut and swagger, flip their hair and pout their lips." (Quotation from an online magazine with no page numbers.)
4. Grosaru, Lucia. “Toddlers and child beauty pageants – Risk factors for severe psychological turmoil’s.” Everyday Psychology Everyday Psychology, 7 Sept. 2009. Web. 23 Nov. 2015. In an article by Lucia Grosaru in Everyday Psychology, the Psychologist states “Of course, these little beauties do not enter the contests at their own request, but their mothers are the ones to fill in the applications on time, pay the participation fee, create or buy the outfit, establish the type of performance for the „talent” section … create and exercise the hairstyle and make-up, keep a strict rehearsal schedule, hire trainers if the mom herself cannot coach the whole thing, fill in the gas tank and travel hundreds of miles with their children just to spend a weekend on an emotional roller coaster that for most of the mother-daughter teams has its last stop on „low”.” (Quotation from an online magazine with no page numbers)
5. In her Newsweek article, Jessica indicates that these young minds are heavily coached, often by the mother figure in their life.
6. According to Justin O'Neill, a magazine writer with Scholastic Scope evaluates the affect that child performances have on their overall attitude. "Four-year-old Karley stands in her family's kitchen, dressed in a bikini. She screams in terror as her mom approaches with a spray can. There is no escape for Karley. The dreaded moment has arrived.
   The instant the cold mist hits her bare shoulders, Karley squirms, cries out, and stomps her feet. She shakes like she has been electrocuted.
   "Look at your white legs!" Karley's mom scolds, while covering her daughter head to toe with fake tanner.
   Welcome to the strange world of child beauty pageants." (1) In this article it is clear that this "sport" and what it entails, holds a great place in the way that these children act.

Spriggs analysis

1.      The Sprigg’s essay is Sprigg’s forming and sharing her opinion on local grown organic produce. Her opinion was expressed that the advantages of locally owned farms outweigh the disadvantages. She then presented very picky counterarguments that counter argued her point so her position looked stronger.

2.      The second article we analyzed was about the legalization of marijuana in Colorado. The article was more pro legalization of marijuana because the data supports that highway fatalities have decreased since the legalization of marijuana. Some counterarguments that they made were that the anti-pot group, SAM pointed out that even before the first legal pot store opened in Washington State, the number of driver in that state testing positive for pot jumped by one-third.

3.      The last article we analyzed was the unrealistic nature of Photoshop and people to what we accept as “standard”. It was mainly against it due to the number of facts represented in the article. For example, from the 1990’s to now, due to photo shopping there has been an 119% increase in eating disorders for children 12 years and younger.

4.      The Sprigg’s essay and our analyzed articles differentiate due to lack of counterarguments in the positive and/or negative positions. The articles are more statistical-based, rather than the Sprigg’s essay which is more observational. However, the Sprigg’s essay and the analyzed articles are all similar in the way that they all have a very strong stance and position on their topic. 

Polished Second Essay (ads)

Sarah Hamal

Begert English 101

Advertisement Analysis

Practical Products

Starting from the time we are born, to until we are through college for some, we highly depend on our mothers in our life time. Whether conscious or not, moms do small things throughout the day that all combine into one big picture that often times we cannot see. This is basically the job of a mother figure. Keep everything on track, with as little time and attention to the smaller things. Most people focus on the big picture, which is making it through the day, taking care of one’s self, and, in the case of these moms, their offspring as well. This influence on young lives is often times brought to light in the transition of leaving childhood, and becoming an adult. During this time in our lives, we truly realize that we must time manage on our own, to do daily tasks. One of those somewhat irrelevant and commonly overlooked tasks is the time women find to put into their own hair, and or its general appearance.  Personally, waking up in the morning, (keeping in mind how much I don’t want to), I analyze every step I will take to get ready that morning and approximately how long it will take me to do so. Being that I only worry about myself, the amount of effort I put into my look for the day is up to me. I do not have to think about getting my child ready for school, I do not worry about presenting myself at work, nothing. I worry about how much sleep I can possibly get. Keeping that in mind, it is very easy to spot the angle that an advertisement would approach women from, now a days. There is an illusion that all women actually care about is the opinion of a man, but in reality she considers how much time she can actually spend on herself at that time. Out of the ads that I have analyzed, one common theme has occurred. Advertisements strategically target women in these ads by offering products that will supposedly save valued time.

Although these ads are different brands of hair product, the ad still is doing its job in a similar way. The Suave ad, and the dry shampoo ad were very similar in concept. The Suave ad really draws the eye with a large picture of a woman’s head, with an even large stack of dirty dishes on top of it.  To me, this represents the big picture that the women’s hair in fact, is replaced with dishes, and therefor she does not care about is appearance, but instead she cares about getting done what she must get done in one day. Or, maybe the time she does have for her hair is preferred as minimal, the stats in this ad would still it the bill. The advertisement directly targets any women who feels that they spend a lot of time on tasks such as dishes or laundry, in return making them question the time they put into their hair. This ad; along with the 1970’s dry shampoo ad, both suggest that the busy mother do not sacrifice time from her day on her own hair. Or in other words, represents that a mother figure just simply would spend less time if any on themselves.

In contrast to the theme of advertising by saying,” spend less time here and you get more time for said task!” This ad draws readers in a different way. By painting a picture of a possible example of a ”girl(s) you hate”, this draws a readers eye in a different way. By giving this young thin girl, pretty blonde hair with nice curls, she seems to be the spokesperson of jealousy in this sun-in-hair-treatments world. In one way or another the girl in this ad is looking at you in a way that suggests that people would hate her for her great hair and polished features. The ad specifically suggests that you can simply “Stop hating them. Start being them.” Whoever the “them” they are referring to is, must look like this girl does. At least that is what w are lead to assume. When you use this amazing Sun in product, etc. Although this ad successfully paints the image of what an American woman may wish to be, current ads can clearly also connect with an audience and sell a lot of product. By being honest in the way they are trying to target the bustling mother or other young woman's busy lifestyle. One that doesn’t necessarily involve any large amount of time spent on worrying about what others may think of them, or what they may look like.

In this instant shampoo ad, conceptually it is very similar to the Suave ad. The hidden picture is communicating the idea that this shampoo may take just as little time as it does to say the name; “Psssst!” Here you can see the same exact text, side by side. It shows one message in two pictures. The (Psssst!) Dry Shampoo ad reads “Between shampoos my hair starts feeling dirty and stringy and I get very depressed. I feel ugly. So I handle the problem this simple way. It’s quick. It’s easy. It doesn’t get my hair all wet. Now I never have to worry about my hair not looking clean and shiny.” This ad is almost comical, yet very efficient in delivering the main idea of the product. Side by side a women who is smiling and holding what seems to be an unnamed beauty product, is right next to a figure with a bag on their head, but the same message to follow. This image brings the comedy, because the reality and thought of someone actually trying to solve a problem by putting a bag on their head, quickly becomes unrealistic. Whether it be suggesting that putting a bag over your head would in fact take the same amount of time as it would to use this product. The next thing that is appealing to the eye, is the brand name “Psssst!”, this draws my eye towards the ad in the sense that there is some sort of great secret to be told about this product.

Over many decades it is obvious, and easy to see how each and every advertisement has evolved. Evolving not only in the way that they change, but by using and re-using techniques that have always worked the best. Starting anywhere from way back in the 1970’s, to modern day we can see the effort women do and always have put into presenting themselves; either to the world, or a man. The difference really is in the audience they approach and how. These ads were an example of just how precisely one could draw in a busy woman, with all her added needs, and really target and provide for her something that works with her lifestyle. With this new way to reach women, comes a great new importance to maintain this audience; being that it has opened the window to what we now call a very large, very successful hair product industry.

Texting and Driving Summary and Analysis

This video included three separate stories. The first told by the sister or a girl who crashed by looking at a text message sent by her too long. She was ejected from her truck and was killed in the accident. The next, a boy was in a car with friends and the next thing he knew the car was wrapped around a tree. He lived but he is learning to cope with significant brain damage. The last story is told by a mother and father, and a state trooper. A girl was receiving directions on her phone and hit the concrete edge of a brick and was ejected out pf the drivers side door in the crash. The obvious moral to this story is the reality of how texting and driving can be very deadly and dangerous.

The point of this video was to show a strong emotional message that can affect an audience with enough movement and fear that they themselves will no longer risk it. They do a great job at appealing to our emotions through the words of those still mourning.

In class lab Nov 12

1.       They used pathos in the drunk driving accident by showing the position of the car against the telephone pole. That image helped relate to what the family may be feeling, and the reality of how it could happen to anyone comes with that.

2.       Ethos is found in the point that it can happen to anyone. When the friend explains it, having firsthand experience is eye opening. Videos of the girls as small children shows their innocence and shows that their parents are just as caring as anyone else’s. It applies a reality check and offers that it can happen to anyone at any time no matter how hard you try to protect your kids.

3.       Verbally they appeal to people’s emotions. Each story pulls a different string. It does this through firsthand stories, demonstrating its use of pathos and ethos.

How Things Mean

Symbols of Patriotism:

USA: Suggests High patriotism, strength and power. Firstly, they use the symbol of America which is of the highest patriotism. Secondly, the eagle itself looks as though it’s extremely stern portraying a position of power. Thirdly, the American flag is on the eagle itself further giving a sense of patriotism.

Great Britain: Suggests that Britain is powerful and stands out from other nations whilst still being humble. Firstly, the dog looks off into the distance but also looks as though it’s not going to back down, giving a sense of power. Secondly, they use a light colored dog, which gives a sense of innocence while maintaining the ferocity that the dog is.

France: Suggest that France is more about the people and their ethical standards. Firstly, there’s not representation of their flag. However their slogan is carved in stone which suggests that it’s ever lasting compared to the dog and eagle because they have a limited amount of time. Secondly, the picture shows a camera which is used for surveillance and that means they’re focused on their people.

Watches:

Rolex: Suggests that you are in a position of wealth and power. Firstly, it does this through the use of the name, “Rolex” in general because it’s an expensive brand. It tells that the person is in a financially stable enough point in their lives to splurge money on luxury items that they don’t necessarily need.

Hello Kitty: Suggests that it’s for the youth and something to temporary satisfy a person. Firstly, it does this because of the low quality that the watch is. Also it is a lot smaller and compact possibly symbolizing a less financially stable position. There’s also a picture of the “Hello Kitty” cartoon on it which again suggests that it’s for children and those less financially stable and something temporary. 

Argument 1: Between all the symbols of patriotism they all differ in their own way but all present the same general ideas of representing what their country stands for.

Argument 2: Between the two watches, one can infer that Rolex is for those who are financially stable and for those who are successful. Compared to Hello Kitty which is something that’s just temporary 

Reading Sources Critically

Reading Sources Critically

   Made the argument about double standards on when, how and if it’s appropriate between black people and white people. Our whole history has been written in double standards. The way teaching is currently handled when talking about classic texts that contain the word teaching can be taught in a non-racist way but as it is currently, that’s not happening. It’s not our job to help them reclaim the word, yet if we want to help we can, “march on the school boards, the police stations and health care”.

2.       I find the argument extremely persuasive. One reason for his argument is the word has been used as a slur and not in a friendly manner. Secondly we, white people, have to realize that there’s a history behind the word, it’s something that should be between black people. The one thing I disagree with is his use of a redneck example because there’s not nearly the significance behind it. He acknowledges the opposing arguments more than I would’ve thought of.

3.       It obvious that he doesn’t agree with white people using the n-word and that it should be left to black people and there isn’t nearly the emotional and historical impact on us as compared to them.

4.       Boston Colleges’ stance is of one that’s against the use of the word in general. Given the website there are many articles and discussions concerning the use of the word and professors on the topic.

5.       Compared to the speech from time wise, Boston College is still against it. However the college gives more historical context of the word. For example in another video they present the idea that the word was originally used to sell things like, “Nigger Clams”.

6.       This topic goes against what we think. We believe that the constitution presented to the people of America Freedom of Speech. It’s been around for a long time and yes people can use it as a slur but same can go for white people. So in reality we believe that people should try to make a disconnect between the word and a racial slur because it’s going to be around for a long time but it’s not necessarily bad.

7.       The intended audience is for everyone who have used the word or are around the word. This is his audience because they want people to acknowledge what they are using and the context behind it. His purpose is to have people aware of when, how and if it’s appropriate to the use the word and who is saying it. Even though it doesn’t affect you it affects others. He gave an example of him being from the south and jokes that are made about him but it’s not necessarily bad because the person making it is from the south so it’s okay.

In class lab November 5th

Thursday, November 5, 2015
Page 62: Think About the Genre/ Page 66 in class lab
Things I've taken positions on over the week:
1. What car to drive to school
2. What type of food to eat.
3. What time to leave for work.
4. What to write about for class.
5. What advertisements were most powerful for my essay
6. What tooth paste is best to use.
7. Where to eat for lunch with friends
8. Responding to classmates papers and their position.
9. Debate position: Pro vs. Con
Other peoples:
1. Outfit choices
2. When to eat
3. If it is okay to hit people

Page 66 in class lab:

Gun control memes:

https://llwproductions.files.wordpress.com/2013/04/meme-deer-shooting-back.jpg
This appeals to us because it is a funny way to say someones position. They used a joke, and a picture of a man everyone knows to make a meme about gun control. To support its position it asks a question, and then answers it with a punch line that delivers their stance. For a serious audience we would change it to saying "No one needs 30 rounds in their gun, because deer can not shoot back.". To change its medium we would switch the position and explain why so many rounds are needed.

https://stophittingyourbrother.files.wordpress.com/2013/01/gun-control-memes.jpg
On this website there are two different memes that have two different positions. The fist one has a quote from Ronald Reagan saying how he feels about guns. He said that it was okay to have guns for self defense but a machine gun is too much and no one really needs one in their home. The second meme has the word guns repeated several times next to phases that represent what we use to defend things like our homes and president. At the bottom it reads "We defend our children with a sign that reads 'this is a GUN FREE ZONE'". The quote from a historic person works because people trust his opinion and they logically can follow what he says. The second meme speaks to peoples emotions because their children or niece is not being protected while at school or in certain environments. To change them we would make them either appeal to someones comedic genre or have them be more serious depending on the audience.

http://www.quickmeme.com/img/5d/5d3a151b7d0d3b9e0bf5fd0f87d5023c63d74801655090fcf02f5579247c51f1.jpg
This memes is a picture of a man trying not to laugh while pretending to think. Around him it says "That Facebook post really make me think about my stance on gun control, said no one ever".  This appeals to us because it is funny and relatable. Really it means that it is hard to sway peoples opinions, but when you're on Facebook and something about gun control comes up you kind of laugh and scroll past. The thing we would change is maybe using a picture of someone we know. We would change the content to change the medium. We would make the meme have a position on gun control itself.

Bibliography:
Michelle. Cartoon. Motley News, 6 April. 2013.
Sallah. Cartoon. Stop Hitting Your Brother. 31 January. 2013
Quick Memes. Cartoon. Quick meme.com.

Taking Stock part 2

1. While analyzing the text, I placed a lot of helpful descriptions through the essay. Along with explaining to the audience the message that is being uncovered within each specific ad.
2. When i was drafting I kind of just went on a tangent and spat out a lot of random ideas. Usually you would draft and outline first, but i am choosing to do a reverse outline. To organize the ideas i have drafted and elaborate more on the ads that in my opinion were briefly summarized.
3. My analysis is not very organized yet. I'm going to write a reverse outline to do so. By making a chart and writing down topics with my supporting details and then sorting them.
4. I provided some evidence but more elaboration needs to be done.
5. I think that I wrote my thesis especially well. it connects back to it through the evidence and support I show in my ads, throughout the entire text.
6. A lot can be improved. Most in the way that my thoughts can be better grouped together. And  I'm in need of a good conclusion.
7. I implemented pictures of the ads in my analysis. I was hoping this would really help the audience to visualize the examples that I was describing, even better.
8. The other readers responses to my first draft were shocking to me. They thought a lot higher of the paper I wrote than I personally did because I know I can write a more organized essay than this first draft.
9. Next time, depending on how well i can write a reversed outline, I would probably begin again by throwing out ideas. Pre-writing is helpful, but it is a technique I have been using for a long time.
10. I am pleased with my analysis thus far.. It does not peak my interest in the slimy ways advertisers have learned to get under our skin and implemented into our daily lives, though.
11. I will transfer the reversed outline strategy because it seems to be a great way to organize ideas. Let alone it is nice to be able to use a different technique to my own writing.

self essay analysis

1.       Thesis: Advertisements strategically target women in these ads by offering products that promise to save their valued time.

2.       Evidence to support: I explain every ad and its pint, along with explaining what the ad itself says. With that I should add a bit more evidence to the support of my thesis.

3.       I need to site my pictures, and look into the background of the ads ad their sponsors.

4.       My opening begins by describing a memory that we all have. This situation helps us take a closer look at the lives our mothers lived when or while we have depended on them. I should begin to provide more background info earlier on?

5.       Conclusion: Throughout the years few things have changed. As you can see from these ads, different age periods can easily coincide with the way that choose to approach the women who would buy or use these hair products. Although many things have changed, big name brands have found a way to successfully attract the consumer. Women with busy lives have been around for decades. But women with busy lives and little to no time for their own hair, has successfully opened the window to what we now call a very large, very successful hair and hair product industry.